Hi Vijay,
Thanks for reviewing the draft.
See inline.
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Document: draft-ietf-psamp-info-10.txt
Reviewer: Vijay K. Gurbani
Review Date: 29 Sept. 2008
IETF LC End Date: 29 Sept. 2008
IESG Telechat date: unknown
Summary: This draft is ready for publication as a Proposed
Standard. Some feedback on the draft below:
- S1, first paragraph, third sentence says
"A standardized way for the export and storage is required."
Question: Storage of what? I suspect that you mean "A standardized
way for the export and storage of Information Elements defined
in Section 8 is required."
Right.
- Nit: S2. second paragraph:
s/Selection", describes/Selection" describes
Yes.
- S9, the normative MUST in the second paragraph appears to be
misplaced. Instead, it would seem that the "must" appearing
in the next paragraph ought to be made normative. That is,
in the following paragraph:
The underlying protocol used to exchange the information
described here must therefore apply appropriate
procedures to guarantee the integrity and confidentiality
of the exported information
s/must/MUST
And again, that makes sense.
Regards, Benoit.
Thanks,
- vijay
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