Francis, Thank you for your review and comments.
We have address all your comments and other IESG review comments in 04 draft which is just posted. Thank you for your time and help, Luyuan -----Original Message----- From: [email protected] [mailto:[email protected]] Sent: 13 November 2008 06:14 To: [email protected] Cc: [email protected]; [email protected]; Luyuan Fang (lufang); [email protected] Subject: review of draft-ietf-mpls-ldp-igp-sync-03.txt I have been selected as the General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) reviewer for this draft (for background on Gen-ART, please see http://www.alvestrand.no/ietf/gen/art/gen-art-FAQ.html). Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments you may receive. Document: draft-ietf-mpls-ldp-igp-sync-03.txt Reviewer: Francis Dupont Review Date: 2008-11-12 IETF LC End Date: 2008-11-18 IESG Telechat date: unknown Summary: Almost Ready Comments: I have many editorial concerns: - Abstract page 1: use of abbrevs (LSP, LDP, VPN, IGP). IMHO only IP and MPLS are supposed to be known by everybody... (note the Abstract is considered as an autonomous text for that) - Abstract page 1: e.g. -> e.g., - ToC page 2: * With -> with ? * Author's -> Authors' * Acknowledgements -> Acknowledgments - Abbrevs: as the document *heavily* uses abbrevations I propose to reference as early as possible (i.e., before the first abbrev) a place where the terminology (including abbrevs) is defined. - 1 page 2: i.e. -> i.e., - 1 page 2: a L2 -> an L2 ? - 1 page 3: can not -> cannot ? - 2 page 4: can not -> cannot ? - 4 page 5 (title): With -> with - 5 page 5: trigged -> triggered ? - 9 page 6: Author's -> Authors' - 10 page 8: Acknowledgements -> Acknowledgments - 10 page 8: please move Acknowledgments before the Copyright Regards [email protected] _______________________________________________ Gen-art mailing list [email protected] https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/gen-art
