I have been selected as the General Area Review Team (Gen-ART)
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Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments
you may receive.
Document: draft-ietf-netlmm-pmipv6-heartbeat-04.txt
Reviewer: Miguel Garcia <[email protected]>
Review Date: 2009-02-26
IETF LC End Date: 2009-03-03
IEST Telechat date: 2009-03-12
Summary: The document is ready for publication as a Standards track RFC.
There are no issues in the document, however, a few editorial comments.
- Figures: it would be nice to include a Figure number and a caption in
each figure. This makes life easier if another document needs to refer to
such figure, so that document could say "According to Figure 2 in RFC
xxxx..."
- The first figure in Section 3.3 lacks the numbers that represent the
order of bits in the figure.
- idnits reports that RFC 4887 (an informational document) is referred to
as a normative document. I think RFC 4887 should be an informational
reference.
- I noticed that IANA has correctly understood the intended actions.
However, I think the text in the draft is a bit cryptographically
encrypted. I would have removed references to the registry created by RFC
3775 and instead I would have mentioned the registry by name: "Mobile
IPv6 parameters registry, Mobility Header types for the MH Type field in
the mobility header subregistry". Long, but precise.
/Miguel
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Miguel A. Garcia
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Ericsson Spain
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