Thanks - I put your Nits in the comments so the RFC Editor will get
them.
On Jun 9, 2009, at 4:06 PM, Francis Dupont wrote:
I have been selected as the General Area Review Team (Gen-ART)
reviewer for this draft (for background on Gen-ART, please see
http://www.alvestrand.no/ietf/gen/art/gen-art-FAQ.html).
Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments
you may receive.
Document: draft-ietf-sipping-cc-framework-11.txt
Reviewer: Francis Dupont
Review Date: 2009-06-09
IETF LC End Date: 2009-06-09
IESG Telechat date: unknown
Summary: Ready
Major issues: None
Minor issues: None
Nits/editorial comments:
- in Abstract page 2: SIP -> Session Initiation Protocol (SIP)
- ToC page 3: Far fork -> Far-fork (or Near-fork -> Near fork but
fixing the far branch seems better)
- Toc page 4: Acknowledgements -> Acknowledgments
(IETF/RFC Editor spelling)
- 2.3 page 10: the UA abbrev should be introduced (and IMHO far
before)
- 2.4.2.1 page 12: large- scale -> large-scale
- 2.6.7.2 page 17: the IVR abbrev must be introduced
- 3.3.2 page 26: from controller) -> from controller):
- 3.3.2 page 26: i.e. -> i.e.,
(same for other i.e. and e.g.)
- 3.3.5 page 28: a central mixer) -> a central mixer).
- 3.3.8 page 29 (title): Far fork -> Far-fork
- 3.2.8 page 30: forked-media -> forked media ?
- 4 page 30: The class ... include -> includes ?
- 6.31 page 39: (ex: -> (e.g.,
- 7 page 39 (title): Acknowledgements -> Acknowledgments
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