That seems sufficient.
Joel
Avshalom Houri wrote:
For the definition of a day, I will add in the definition of C01 that
8 hours lifetime of subscriptions that is defined in C01 and a day are
synonymous in this document.
Thanks
--Avshalom
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Joel,
Thanks for reviewing this long document.
Will resolve the comments as part of a next revision after the last call.
Thanks
--Avshalom
From: "Joel M. Halpern" <[email protected]>
To: Mary Barnes <[email protected]>, General Area Review Team
<[email protected]>, Ben Campbell <[email protected]>
Date: 26/06/2009 06:46 PM
Subject: [Gen-art] [gen-art] review:
draft-ietf-simple-interdomain-scaling-analysis-06.txt
Sent by: [email protected]
(As all comments are minor, and there are many authors, I am directing
this to the shepherd rather than copying all the authors and WG.)
I have been selected as the General Area Review Team (Gen-ART)
reviewer for this draft (for background on Gen-ART, please see
http://www.alvestrand.no/ietf/gen/art/gen-art-FAQ.html
<http://www.alvestrand.no/ietf/gen/art/gen-art-FAQ.html> ).
Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments
you may receive.
Document: draft-ietf-simple-interdomain-scaling-analysis-06.txt
Presence Interdomain Scaling Analysis for SIP/SIMPLE
Reviewer: Joel M. Halpern
Review Date: 26-June-2009
IETF LC End Date: 6-July-2009
IESG Telechat date: N/A
Summary: This document is probably ready for publication as an
Informational RFC. If revisions are needed, some minor items should be
considered.
Major issues:
Minor issues:
I think that I do not understand how the document uses
the term "day".
c01 is the average lifetime of a subscription. However, it also seems
to be the definition of day in section 2.3.5. This is not a big deal as
it seems to normalize out when one looks at the per-second numbers. But
it seems to make the "per day" numbers confusing. I suspect that what
is needed is simply a definition of "day" for this document.
Nits/editorial comments:
The introduction has multiple examples of unusual
English language
usages. They are not listed here, but are left to the editors to
analyze and resolve. (This problem continues at a lower frequency
throughout the document.)
Section 2.3.5 labels the third bottom line value as B02
instead of B03.
The third line in section 3.1.3 should have a comma in
the 23437M
number for readability.
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