I have been selected as the General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) reviewer
for this draft (for background on Gen-ART, please see
http://www.alvestrand.no/ietf/gen/art/gen-art-FAQ.html). Please resolve
these comments along with any other Last Call comments you may receive.
Document: draft-ietf-pwe3-segmented-pw-13.txt
Reviewer: Sean Turner
Review Date: 2009-08-31
IETF LC End Date: 2009-09-02
IESG Telechat date: N/A
Summary: This draft is basically ready for publication, but has nits
that should be fixed before publication.
Nits:
http://www.ietf.org/id-info/checklist.html indicates that should not be
more than 5 authors. There's 7 on this one.
Normally, the introduction is section #1. I'd suggest making Section 3
Section 1 and Section 1 Section 3.
Sec 7.4.1: Indicates the PW Switching Point description string is 80
characters long. Shouldn't it say more about what the character set is?
Sec 8.4.1: Figure shows both AC "Up" and AC "UP". Should they all be "Up"?
Sec 16: r/Author's/Authors'
According to the nits checker:
== Outdated reference: A later version (-11) exists of
draft-ietf-pwe3-oam-msg-map-10
== Outdated reference: A later version (-07) exists of
draft-ietf-pwe3-ms-pw-arch-06
There are a couple of places where " , " appears and should be changed
to ", "
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