Hi Gonzalo, Thanks for your review. I basically agree with all your commends and have no problem with changing the draft to resolve them.
Thanks again, Donald ============================= Donald E. Eastlake 3rd +1-508-333-2270 (cell) 155 Beaver Street Milford, MA 01757 USA [email protected] On Fri, Dec 4, 2009 at 4:19 AM, Gonzalo Camarillo < [email protected]> wrote: > Hi, > > I have been selected as the General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) > reviewer for this draft (for background on Gen-ART, please see > http://www.alvestrand.no/ietf/gen/art/gen-art-FAQ.html). > > Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments > you may receive. > > > Draft: draft-eastlake-nlpid-iana-considerations-03.txt > Reviewer: Gonzalo Camarillo <[email protected]> > Review Date: 4 December 2009 > > Summary: > > This draft is basically ready for publication, but has nits that should > be fixed before publication. > > > Comments: > > The acronym NLPID should be expanded in the title of the draft. > > The second paragraph of the Introduction could be more clear. It states > that "the term NLPID is used for these values." These values seems to > refer to most values that are usable both as IPI and SPI but if the > phrase could be rephrased to be more clear, that would be useful. > > Adding a hyphen so that "one octet" becomes "one-octet" throughout the > text would help as well. > > In Section 3, the draft states: "To simplify this process, it is > desirable to maintain an IETF Liaison to ISO/IEC JTC1 SC6." Who is the > receiver of this statement. It seems to me that such advice should be > sent to the IAB so that they continue this liaison relationship. > Clarifying who is the receiver of this statement would be useful. > > Thanks, > > Gonzalo > > >
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