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Please resolve these comments along with any other last call comments you may receive. Document: draft-westerlund-mmusic-3gpp-sdp-rtsp-07 Reviewer: Wassim Haddad Review Date: 2010-03-01 Summary: Ready Major issues: None Minor issues: - Definitions: - RTSP: "Real" Time Streaming Protocol - QoE: In PSS, (add comma) 2. Introduction: s/later/subsequent "there has occasionally been _a_ need to extend…" s/functionality/functionalities IMHO, the following is not clear. I suggest re-writing: "The document begins with two chapters presenting the different extensions of SDP for PSS and MBMS, respectively, followed by a section noting that offer/answer considerations are not applicable here". 3. "or" addressed => "nor" addressed s/change/changing 4. IMHO, the following is ambiguous. I suggest re-writing: "They are informatively listed below grouped by purpose" 4.3: - s/they/the - s/keymanagement/key management 4.5: - s/of [PSS…] /in [PSS…] 5.3. For release 6, one such parameter is defined to specify the required… 5.4. - s/and/or - As required by SDP [RFC4566], (add comma) 5.4.1 - For FEC-protected RTP streams, (add comma) 7.4. - s/happen/happens 7.5. - … been given "x-" name, (add comma) - it was too late "to" rename them due to deployment. 7.7. - It is only a syntax restriction server "that" manufacturers follow… 9. - Also in this case, (add comma) - IMHO, the last paragraph should clarify what authors mean by: "The media stream and the protocols identified by the protocol identifier may however contain security issues by themselves". Regards, Wassim H.
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