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Document: draft-ietf-krb-wg-preauth-framework-16
Reviewer: Vijay K. Gurbani
Review Date: April 8, 2010
IESG Telechat date: April 8, 2010
Summary: This draft is ready for publication as a Proposed Standard.
It has 0 major issues, 0 minor issues and 2 nits.
1) In the Abstract and Section 1, you may want to consider expanding
the first occurrence of KDC.
2) In Section 1, when I first read "padata" I assumed it was a typo-
graphical error. However, that is not the case since "padata" is
defined on the next page in Section 2. My suggestion would be to
simply advise the reader what "padata" is on first occurrence;
something like the following:
OLD (Section 1, 3rd paragraph):
... tunneling (FAST) padata type ...
NEW
... tunneling (FAST) pre-authentication data (padata) type ...
Thanks,
- vijay
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