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Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments you may receive. Document: draft-hethmon-mcmurray-ftp-hosts-11 Reviewer: Pete McCann Review Date: 2010-05-10 IETF LC End Date: 2010-05-10 IESG Telechat date: unknown Summary: Ready Major issues: none Minor issues: Section 3.1: the server-PI should respond with a 501 reply if the client sends a HOST command with syntax like "HOST 192.0.2.1:2112" or "HOST [FE80::c000:0201]:2112". Do you want to capitalize SHOULD or change to a MUST? Section 3.3: here again, lots of lower-case "should". Capitalize? Nits/editorial comments: Section 2.0: document, those SHOULD BE: document; those Section 3.0: as a though SHOULD BE: as though authentication, and then SHOULD BE: authentication and then Section 3.2.1: to that it was SHOULD BE: to what it was Section 3.2.2: In this scenario, the user-PI sends a HOST command which the server-PI uses to route activity to the correct virtual host, the user-PI sends credentials using the USER and PASS commands which the server-PI validates, then the user-PI sends an ACCT command to specify any additional account information for the server-PI implementation. SHOULD BE: In this scenario, the user-PI sends a HOST command which the server-PI uses to route activity to the correct virtual host; the user-PI sends credentials using the USER and PASS commands which the server-PI validates; then, the user-PI sends an ACCT command to specify any additional account information for the server-PI implementation. In this scenario, the user-PI sends a HOST command which the server-PI uses to route activity to the correct virtual host, then the user-PI uses the AUTH and ADAT commands to negotiate the security mechanism and certificate with the server-PI, then the user-PI sends user credentials using the USER and PASS commands which the server-PI validates. After which the user-PI may send an ACCT command to specify any additional account information for the server-PI SHOULD BE: In this scenario, the user-PI sends a HOST command which the server-PI uses to route activity to the correct virtual host; the user-PI uses the AUTH and ADAT commands to negotiate the security mechanism and certificate with the server-PI; then, the user-PI sends user credentials using the USER and PASS commands which the server-PI validates. After that, the user-PI may send an ACCT command to specify any additional account information for the server-PI Section 3.2.3: Make sure the figures don't have page breaks in them (maybe the RFC editor will take care of this). Also, do you want to add captions? _______________________________________________ Gen-art mailing list [email protected] https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/gen-art
