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Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments you may receive. Document: draft-ietf-ccamp-rwa-wson-framework-10 Reviewer: Pete McCann Review Date: 2011-02-07 IETF LC End Date: 2011-02-01 IESG Telechat date: unknown Summary: Ready with nits Major issues: none Minor issues: none Nits/editorial comments: Section 3.1: applications examples SHOULD BE: applications. Examples Section 3.2: one doesn't not want Double negative. Section 3.3: prime focus of this document general concern as opposed to SHOULD BE: prime focus of this document as opposed to Section 3.3.2: FEC is for Forward Error Correction not Forwarding Equivalence Class Section 3.4.1: very dense, compact encodings and examples, SHOULD BE: very dense. Compact encodings and examples, Figure 2: If Figure 1 is degree 2, wouldn't Figure 2 be degree 8 instead of 4? Section 3.6: conversion, optically SHOULD BE: conversion optically each on the use of SHOULD BE: each use of would be different the lambda coming back SHOULD BE: would be different from the lambda coming back Section 3.6.1: a similar technique can be used to model ROADMs and optical switches SHOULD BE: a technique similar to that used to model ROADMs and optical switches can reach potentially reach SHOULD BE: can potentially reach Section 3.7.3: same at that SHOULD BE: same as that Section 4.1.1: nodes capabilities SHOULD BE: nodes' capabilities Section 4.1.3: distributed, manner SHOULD BE: distributed manner Depending on these policies a wavelength assignment may not be found or one consuming too many conversion resources relative to what a dedicated wavelength assignment policy would have achieved. SHOULD BE: Depending on these policies a wavelength assignment may not be found or one may be found that consumes too many conversion resources relative to what a dedicated wavelength assignment policy would have achieved. performance relatively to blocking. SHOULD BE: performance with respect to blocking probability. Section 4.2: Or other ways to limit SHOULD BE: There may be other ways to limit Section 5: This section provides examples of the fixed and switch optical node and wavelength constraint models of Section 3. and WSON control plane use cases related to path computation, establishment, rerouting, and optimization. SHOULD BE: This section provides examples of the fixed and switch optical node and wavelength constraint models of Section 3 and use cases for WSON control plane path computation, establishment, rerouting, and optimization. Section 6.1.2: As discussed in Section 3.3.2. a WSON signal SHOULD BE: As discussed in Section 3.3.2, a WSON signal Section 6.2.1: Note that since the bit rate SHOULD BE: Note that the bit rate per port basis, see, SHOULD BE: per port basis; see Section 6.3: path computations (PCE-GCO) [RFC5557], PCE is well positioned to SHOULD BE: path computations (PCE-GCO) [RFC5557]. The PCEP is well positioned to _______________________________________________ Gen-art mailing list [email protected] https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/gen-art
