Hi Vijay, We have just submitted -13 of the draft that fixes both the nits that you have listed below.
1) S8.2, "IC2 - Keys should be ..." --- here, is the "should" normative? SB: Change to "IC2 - Keys SHOULD be..." 2) S8.2, "IC8 ... This will enable you to counter certain types of man-in-the-middle attacks." The use of "you" seems funny here; better to say, "... This will enabling the thwarting of certain types of man-in-the-middle attacks." SB: Revised text: "IC8 ... This will mitigate against certain types of man-in-the-middle attacks." Thanks, Siddharth -----Original Message----- From: Vijay K. Gurbani [mailto:[email protected]] Sent: Thursday, February 03, 2011 9:51 AM To: [email protected] Cc: General Area Review Team; Hannes Tschofenig; Sean Turner Subject: Gen-ART review of draft-mraihi-mutual-oath-hotp-variants-12 I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. For background on Gen-ART, please see the FAQ at <http://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq>. Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments you may receive. Document: draft-mraihi-mutual-oath-hotp-variants-12 Reviewer: Vijay K. Gurbani Review Date: Feb-03-2011 IETF LC End Date: Feb-08-2011 IESG Telechat date: Feb-17-2011 Summary: This draft is ready as an Informational RFC. Major issues: 0 Minor issues: 0 Nits/editorial comments: 2 Nits/editorials 1) S8.2, "IC2 - Keys should be ..." --- here, is the "should" normative? 2) S8.2, "IC8 ... This will enable you to counter certain types of man-in-the-middle attacks." The use of "you" seems funny here; better to say, "... This will enabling the thwarting of certain types of man-in-the-middle attacks." Thanks, - vijay -- Vijay K. Gurbani, Bell Laboratories, Alcatel-Lucent 1960 Lucent Lane, Rm. 9C-533, Naperville, Illinois 60566 (USA) Email: vkg@{bell-labs.com,acm.org} / [email protected] Web: http://ect.bell-labs.com/who/vkg/ _______________________________________________ Gen-art mailing list [email protected] https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/gen-art
