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Document: draft-ietf-roll-minrank-hysteresis-of-07
Reviewer: Miguel Garcia <[email protected]>
Review Date: 2012-03-27
IETF LC End Date: 2012-04-06
Summary: The document is ready for publication as a standards track RFC
Major issues: none
Minor issues: none
Nits/editorial comments:
- The second sentence of the Abstract reads:
This specification describes the Minimum Rank Objective Function with
Hysteresis (MRHOF), ...
But the title (two lines above) reads slightly different:
The Minimum Rank with Hysteresis Objective Function
I suggest o always use the same term. Since the selected acronym is
MRHOF, I would suggest to always use the title to refer to MRHOF.
- Section 1, last paragraph. The second sentence in this paragraph is
incomplete.
- Please expand acronyms at first usage. This includes: DODAG, ETX
- Section 3.1. Towards the end of the section, the sentence reads:
The path cost corresponding to a neighbor SHOULD be re-computed each
time:
and then there are 3 conditions numbered from 1 to 3. It is not clear if
the path cost should be recomputed when all of the 3 conditions are met,
or when any of the 3 conditions are met. In other words, it is not clear
if the 3 bullet points are an "AND" or an "OR" operation among then.
Presumably they are an "OR". If this is the case, perhaps the sentence
should be rephrased as:
The path cost corresponding to a neighbor SHOULD be re-computed each
time any of the following conditions are met:
/Miguel
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Miguel A. Garcia
+34-91-339-3608
Ericsson Spain
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