Hi, Francis, Thank you very much! We will modify the draft during the RFC Editor process.
Best regards, xing Francis Dupont 写道: > I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. For background on > Gen-ART, please see the FAQ at > > <http://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq>. > > Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments > you may receive. > > Document: draft-ietf-v6ops-ivi-icmp-address-06.txt > Reviewer: Francis Dupont > Review Date: 20120920 > IETF LC End Date: 20120925 > IESG Telechat date: unknown > > Summary: Ready > > Major issues: None > > Minor issues: None > > Nits/editorial comments: > In general the language itself could be improved even there is nothing > which is hard to understand (i.e., it is a comment only on the form). > I suggest to get some help from English native authors or to leave this > to the RFC Editor... > > - 3 page 3: an non-IPv4- -> a non-IPv4- > > - 3 page 3: (style) bound for to (I suggest "sent to") > > - 3.1 page 3: uRPF -> unicast reverse path forwarding (uRPF) > (note: uRPF is in the RFC Editor abbrev list but not as "well known") > > - 3.1 page 3: (style) origination (I suggest "origin" or "source") > > - 3.2 page 4: a question (vs a comment): is RFC 5837 widely supported? > > - 8 page 5: Henrik Levkowetz is included twice > > - 9.1 page 5: BCP 84 is included as a normative reference? > (I have no concern but I'd like to warn this point is questionable) > > - 9.2 page 6: I am not sure ISO IS 3166 codes are appropriate in > postal addresses, so CN -> China? > > Regards > > [email protected] > > > _______________________________________________ Gen-art mailing list [email protected] https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/gen-art
