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Document: draft-ietf-mpls-tp-use-cases-and-design-06
Reviewer: Miguel Garcia <[email protected]>
Review Date: 2013-02-10
IETF LC End Date: 2013-02-11
IESG Telechat date:
Summary: The document is almost ready for publication as Informational
RFC, but has some NITS that should be addressed.
Major issues: none
Minor issues: none
Nits/editorial comments:
- The RFC Editor rules require to expand each acronym at a first usage. I
noticed that the draft uses Section 2 as a container of all the acronyms,
but most of these acronyms have already been used in Section 1. So, I am
not sure if the current text is acceptable to the RFC Editor. Perhaps the
authors should send them a question. One potential idea to explore is
leaving the first paragraph of Section 1 in there, and move the rest of
the Section to a new Section 3, whose potential title is "Background".
This will solve that problem.
- It appears that Section is alphabetically ordered, but the term "NMS"
is misplaced.
- Section 3.3.2, first paragraph. The text refers to "PSW/SGW or ASNGW)".
Section 2 expands "PSW" as Packet Data Network Gateway. I suspect the
acronym is wrong, because the Packet Data Network Gateway is commonly
abbreviated as PDN GW or P-GW. I have never seen PSW to refer to a PDN GW
or P-GW.
/Miguel
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Miguel A. Garcia
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Ericsson Spain
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