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Document: draft-templin-intarea-seal-51.txt Reviewer: Christer Holmberg Review Date: 19 Feb 2013 IETF LC End Date: 20 Feb 2013 IETF Telechat Date: 21 Feb 2013 Summary: The draft is well written, but with some editorial comments that I suggest to be addressed before publication. Major Issues: None Minor Issues: None Editorial nits: See below Q_ED_1: Most of the text in the Abstract section does not belong there. The section should talk about what the document does, and not define what a subnetwork is etc. Only the last sentence talks about what the draft is about. Q_ED_2: In the Introduction section, I would suggest to add a reference for IP encapsulating/tunneling. RFC 2003 is referenced later in the document, but I think it would be good to have something also in the Introduction. Q_ED_3: In section 1.2, do you need to define 'subnetwork' here? Isn't it better to have the definition in one single place - the Terminology section? Q_ED_4: In section 12, there seems to be a dot too much :) Best regards, Christer
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