Suresh: Thank you very much for your review. Carsten et al, I think Suresh raises some valid points here. I'll note the focus on other things besides sensors in particular.
Jari On Aug 13, 2013, at 12:38 PM, Suresh Krishnan <[email protected]> wrote: > I have been selected as the General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) > reviewer for this draft (for background on Gen-ART, please see > http://www.alvestrand.no/ietf/gen/art/gen-art-FAQ.html). > > Please wait for direction from your document shepherd > or AD before posting a new version of the draft. > > Document: draft-ietf-lwig-terminology-05.txt > Reviewer: Suresh Krishnan > Review Date: 2013/08/12 > IESG Telechat date: 2013/08/15 > > Summary: This draft is ready for publication as an Informational RFC but > I do have a few comments that the authors may wish to consider. > > Minor > ===== > > * Section 1 > > Aren't actuators also one class of constrained devices? The section > talks about gathering information but does not talk about constrained > devices acting on information. > > * Section 2.1 > > When speaking about the multiple facets of constraints on the nodes > shouldn't processing power be included as well? There is an item for > power but it is unclear if that means energy/power or processing power. > In either case one of them probably needs to be added. > > * Section 2.2 > > Would it be worth mentioning the asymmetric nature of some of these link > as a constraint? > > * Section 2.3.1 > > This sentence does not read right. Suggest rewording. > > OLD: > In its terminology document, the ROLL working group is saying > [I-D.ietf-roll-terminology]: > > NEW: > The ROLL terminology document [I-D.ietf-roll-terminology] defines LLNs > as follows: > > > * Section 3 > > Please add a reference to the CoAP draft at first use of CoAP. > > > * Section 4.3 > > Should this section also talk a bit about the term "duty cycle" since > this term is used frequently in the constrained device context? > > Thanks > Suresh > > > > _______________________________________________ > Gen-art mailing list > [email protected] > https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/gen-art _______________________________________________ Gen-art mailing list [email protected] https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/gen-art
