Thank you for review of this document, Christer. These reviews are important for me.
Authors, have you seen Christer's review, and do you have a comment? Jari On Sep 11, 2013, at 6:26 PM, Christer Holmberg <[email protected]> wrote: > I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. For background on Gen-ART, > please see the FAQ at < > http://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq>. > > Please wait for direction from your document shepherd or AD before posting a > new version of the draft. > > Document: > draft-ietf-pim-rfc4601-update-survey-report-02.txt > Reviewer: Christer Holmberg > Review Date: 11 September 2013 > IETF LC End Date: 3 September, 2013 > IESG Telechat date: 12 September, 2013 > > Summary: The document is otherwise ready for publication, but > contains some editorial issues that I suggest that the authors address. > > Major issues: - > > Minor issues: - > > Nits/editorial comments: > > General: > > Q_GEN_1: The RFC referencing is done in an inconsistent way: > sometimes [RFC XXXX], sometimes (RFC XXXX), and sometimes RFC XXXX. I suggest > to always use [RFC XXXX], OR to use [RFC XXXX] at the first occurrence, and > then RFC XXXX. > > > Q_GEN_2: The document mixes “PIM-SM” and “PIM Sparse-Mode” > terminology. I suggest to use consistent terminology. > > > > Section 2.2: > > Q_2-2_1: s/“five other anonymous operators”/ “five anonymous > operators” > > > Section 2.2.1: > > Q_2-2-1_1: I suggest to replace “In the last fourteen years” with > “Since <insert the year you are referencing>”. > > > Section 2.3: > > Q_2-3_1: I suggest to replace “Eight vendors have reported PIM > Sparse-Mode implementations” with “Eight vendors responded to the survey”, to > be consistent with the wording in section 2.2. > > > Section 6: > > Q_6_1: Why is the section number needed? Why simply not call it “Appendix A. > Questionnaire”? > > > Regards, > > Christer > > _______________________________________________ > Gen-art mailing list > [email protected] > https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/gen-art _______________________________________________ Gen-art mailing list [email protected] https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/gen-art
