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Document: draft-ietf-netext-update-notifications-08
Reviewer: Robert Sparks
Review Date: 2013-09-24
IETF LC End Date: 2013-08-29
IESG Telechat date: 2013-09-26
Summary: This draft is (still) ready for publication as Proposed
Standard, but there are nits the editors agreed to fix that have not yet
been addressed.
On 8/22/13 1:05 PM, Robert Sparks wrote:
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Document: draft-ietf-netext-update-notifications-07
Reviewer: Robert Sparks
Review Date: 2013-08-22
IETF LC End Date: 2013-08-29
IESG Telechat date: not scheduled
Summary: This draft is ready for publication as Proposed Standard
I had to read through this text several times to convince myself
implementers could figure out what order they were required to take
steps in vs where they had flexibility:
o Upon accepting the Update Notification message, the mobile access
gateway MUST process the message and perform the actions based on
the Notification Reason.
* If the (A) flag in the message is set to a value of (1), the
mobile access gateway MUST first send an Update Notification
Acknowledgement message and set the status code field according
to the result of processing the Update Notification message.
In particular, it's not immediately obvious if there is tension
between that "MUST first" and having "the result of processing" available.
Please consider rewording to make it clearer that this "result of
processing" is not intended to include waiting for the result of some
action processing this notification message might trigger.
It might help readers understand the intended usual case
retransmission mechanics if the expected default values listed in
section 7 were called out earlier in the document.
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