Alexey,

I'll comment on this one, as that was text that I contributed to the draft:

> Allocation Policy: Expert Review [RFC5226] and Specification
>        Required [RFC5226] .
> 
> (And similar text in 4.1:
> 
>     The table is to be managed by IANA using the Expert Review [RFC5226]
>     and Specification Required [RFC5226] allocation policies as further
>     specified in Section 7 .
> )
> 
> I think this is not very clear. If you just meant Specification required
> (which implies Expert review), I would describe it as:
> 
> Allocation Policy: Specification Required [RFC5226] (which includes
> Expert Review [RFC5226]).

That was the intent; your suggestion is clearer.

Thanks,
--David

> -----Original Message-----
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> Alexey Melnikov
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> Subject: [Gen-art] Gen-ART LC Review of draft-ietf-mile-sci-09
> 
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> 
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> 
> Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments
> you may receive.
> 
> Document:  draft-ietf-mile-sci-09.txt
> Reviewer: Alexey Melnikov
> Review Date: 2013-10-16
> IETF LC End Date: 2013-10-22
> 
> Summary: This draft is nearly ready for publication as a Standard Track
> document.
> 
> Major issues:
> 
> I have a couple of IANA related questions/comments about this document.
> I hope they would be easy to address.
> 
> In 4.1:
> 
>     The SpecID attributes of extended classes (Section 4.3) must allow
>     the values of the specifications' namespace fields, but otherwise,
>     implementations are not required to support all specifications of the
>     IANA table and may choose which specifications to support, though the
>     specification listed in the initial table needs to be minimally
>     supported, as described in Section 5.  In case an implementation
>     received a data it does not support, it may expand its functionality
>     by looking up the IANA table or notify the sender of its inability to
> 
> I've been told in the past that IANA's website is not designed for mass
> retrieval of data by multiple devices. So very few (if any)
> specifications actually recommend automatic download of data from IANA's
> website. I think this needs to be discussed with IANA.
> 
>     parse the data by using any means defined outside the scope of this
>     specification.
> 
> In Section 7:
> 
> Allocation Policy: Expert Review [RFC5226] and Specification
>        Required [RFC5226] .
> 
> (And similar text in 4.1:
> 
>     The table is to be managed by IANA using the Expert Review [RFC5226]
>     and Specification Required [RFC5226] allocation policies as further
>     specified in Section 7 .
> )
> 
> I think this is not very clear. If you just meant Specification required
> (which implies Expert review), I would describe it as:
> 
> Allocation Policy: Specification Required [RFC5226] (which includes
> Expert Review [RFC5226]).
> 
> If you meant for Expert Review to be used as an alternative when there
> is no specification, then you need to rephrase this to be clear.
> 
> Minor issues:
> 
> 4.2.  Extended Data Type: XMLDATA
> 
>     This extension inherits all of the data types defined in the IODEF
>     model.  One data type is added: XMLDATA.  An embedded XML data is
>     represented by the XMLDATA data type.  This type is defined as the
>     extension to the iodef:ExtensionType [RFC5070] , whose dtype
>     attribute is set to "xml."
> 
> I think you meant "xml". I.e. the value doesn't include any dots.
> 
> 
> In 4.3.1:
> 
> Platform:  Zero or more.  An identifier of software platform involved
>        in the specific attack pattern, which is elaborated in
>        Section 4.3.2 .
> 
> It would be good to have an idea of what kind of values can be used. In
> particular I am thinking if you are planning to reuse any existing
> registries.
> 
> In Section 9.1:
> 
> [MMDEF]    IEEE ICSG Malware Metadata Exchange Format Working Group,
>                "Malware Metadata Exchange Format".
> 
> [EICAR]    European Expert Group for IT-Security, "Anti-Malware
>                Testfile", 2003.
> 
> These 2 references don't look Normative, as they are only used in an
> example.
> 
> Nits:
> 
> 1.  Introduction
> 
>     To efficiently run cybersecurity operations, these exchanged
>     information needs to be machine-readable.  IODEF provides a
>     structured means to describe the information, but it needs to embed
>     various non-structured such information in order to convey detailed
> 
> Delete "such" before "information"? If that is not the right fix,
> then I don't know what you were trying to say here.
> 
>     information.  Further structure within IODEF increases IODEF
>     documents' machine-readability and thus facilitates streamlining
>     cybersecurity operations.
> 
> In Section 3, last paragraph:
> 
>     Another example is that, when an administrator wishes to check the
>     configuration of host computers in his organization, he may send a
>     query to host computers, which may automatically generate XML-based
>     software configuration information upon receiving thequery by running
> 
> thequery --> the query
> 
>     a software and may embed that to an IODEF document, which is then
>     sent back to the administrator.
> 
> In 4.3.5:
> 
>      WeaknessID:  OPTIONAL.  STRING.  An identifier of a weakness to be
>        reported.  This attribute SHOULD be used whenever such identifier
>        is available/ Both RawData and Reference elements MUST NOT be used
> 
> I think you meant "." instead of "/".
> 
>        when this attribute is used, while either of them MUST be used if
>        this attribute is omitted.
> 
> 4.3.7.  Verifcation
> 
> typo: Verification
> 
>     A Verification consists of an extension to the
>     Incident.AdditionalData element with a dtype of "xml".  The extension
>     elements describes incident on vefifying incidents.
> 
> typo: verifying
> 
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