One additional nit - Don Fedyk's email address listed in the draft does not work.
Thanks, --David > -----Original Message----- > From: Black, David > Sent: Sunday, December 29, 2013 9:46 PM > To: General Area Review Team ([email protected]); [email protected]; > [email protected]; [email protected] > Cc: Black, David; [email protected]; [email protected]; [email protected] > Subject: Gen-ART review of draft-ietf-ccamp-oam-configuration-fwk-11 > > I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. For background on > Gen-ART, please see the FAQ at > > <http://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq>. > > Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments > you may receive. > > Document: draft-ietf-ccamp-oam-configuration-fwk-11 > Reviewer: David L. Black > Review Date: December 29, 2013 > IETF LC End Date: January 5, 2014 > > Summary: This draft is basically ready for publication, but has nits that > should be fixed before publication. > > This draft describes the GMPLS framework for signaling OAM configuration, > and specifies additional RSVP elements to support that signaling. Knowledge > of RSVP, and specifically RSVP-TE is assumed; beyond that, the draft is > complete, although it is very detailed - see editorial comment below on > Section 3. > > Nits/editorial comments: > > Sections 3.1-3.3 dive into the details very quickly. They would be easier to > understand if there was an overview paragraph near the start of Section 3 that > describes the roles of the two ADMIN_STATUS flags and the two LSP Attributes > flags in OAM configuration (establishment, change/adjustment, deletion) before > the current text that contains the details of RSVP message processing. > > There are a number of instances of "(IANA to assign)" in section 4 that the > RFC Editor will need to remove - an RFC Editor note to that effect should > be inserted at the start of Section 4. > > Section 4.5 is necessarily incomplete on P2MP considerations, because (as > it says) "P2MP OAM mechanisms are very specific to the data plane technology". > It would be helpful if section 4.5 contained language indicating what a > specific data plane specification should include to completely specify > P2MP OAM configuration for that data plane. > > idnits 2.13.01 didn't find anything that needs attention. > > Thanks, > --David > ---------------------------------------------------- > David L. Black, Distinguished Engineer > EMC Corporation, 176 South St., Hopkinton, MA 01748 > +1 (508) 293-7953 FAX: +1 (508) 293-7786 > [email protected] Mobile: +1 (978) 394-7754 > ---------------------------------------------------- _______________________________________________ Gen-art mailing list [email protected] https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/gen-art
