Hi Greg, Thank you for considering, it looks very good to me. Best, Meral
From: Gregory Mirsky Sent: Thursday, January 02, 2014 2:56 PM To: Meral Shirazipour; [email protected] Subject: RE: Gen-ART Last Call review of draft-ietf-pwe3-mpls-tp-cv-adv-03 Dear Meral, many thanks for your kind consideration and thoughtful suggestions. I've updated text accordingly with exception of only one. Please check proposed minor changes below. Please let me know if you agree. Regards, Greg [...] -[Page 5], Section 2.4 missing "a" and "are": old: "and common set of proactive CV types advertized" new: "and a common set of proactive CV types are advertised" GIM>> "and a common set of proactive CV types that are advertised ..." General suggestion: - In the abstract something is missing to make it more suitable for standard track. Right now it only says "this document specifies how use of ABC affects XYZ". Examples (to inspire from), Section 1 and 2 mention: " This document specifies how signaling and selection processes are modified to ensure backward compatibility and allow use of proactive CV-CC-RDI over MPLS-TP PWs. " GIM>> "This document specifies how signaling and selection processes for Pseudowire (PW) Virtual Circuit Connectivity Verification (VCCV) are modified to ensure backward compatibility and allow use of proactive Connectivity Verification (CV), Continuity Check (CC), and Remote Defect Indication (RDI) over MPLS Transport Profile (MPLS-TP) PWs." and " This document introduces four new CV types and, to accommodate them, a new VCCV Extended CV parameter for PW Interface Parameters Sub-TLV is defined. " Best Regards, Meral --- Meral Shirazipour Ericsson Research www.ericsson.com<http://www.ericsson.com>
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