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Document: draft-melnikov-smime-msa-to-mda-03
Reviewer: Vijay K. Gurbani
Review Date: Feb-25-2014
IETF LC End Date: Mar-05-2014
IESG Telechat date: Unknown
I must say that this draft was written with implementors in mind.
This is very refreshing.
Major: 0
Minor: 0
Nits: 4
This document is ready as a Proposed Standard. Some minor nits follow:
Nits:
- S2.2, "Organizational policy and good security practice often
require that messages be reviewed before they are released to
external recipients." Here, I suspect that organizational policy may
require such a vetting but I would think that "good security practice"
would not. After all, unless a party is forced to do so (the
"organizational policy" part), why would one party willingly subject
its private communications to a third party before sending it
to the recipient? I would not consider that a third party reading
my messages a "good security practice". Therefore, I would take
the "good security practice" phrase out, unless of course, there is
some context to that phrase that I am not privy to.
- S3.3, first sentence: "A 'domain signature' is a signature generated
on behalf of a set of users in the domain the users are a member of."
This sentence appears rather, for the lack of a better word, clunky.
How about rewriting this as: "A 'domain signature' is a signature
generated on behalf of a set of users who belong to the specific
domain."
- S5, steps 3-A and 3-B: s/found then/found, then/
There are some more occurences of this, if you feel like it, you may
want to change these to have a comma as well.
- S7, first paragraph: s/permits masquerade./permits masquerading./
or, s/permits masquerade attacks./
Thanks,
- vijay
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