Many thanks for you review, Francis. jari
On 01 Oct 2014, at 16:34, Francis Dupont <[email protected]> wrote: > I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. For background on > Gen-ART, please see the FAQ at > > <http://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq>. > > Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments > you may receive. > > Document: draft-ietf-forces-packet-parallelization-02.txt > Reviewer: Francis Dupont > Review Date: 20140930 > IETF LC End Date: 20140929 > IESG Telechat date: 20141002 > > Summary: Ready with nits > > Major issues: none > > Minor issues: none > > Nits/editorial comments: > - Abstract page 1: the FE abbrev should be introduced (in particular > one can believe it means ForCES Element in place of Forwarding Element) > > - ToC page 2 and 6 page 23: Acknowledgements -> Acknowledgments > > - 1 page 3: the ForCES abbrev must be introduced again (the Abstract > is not a part of the document for this) > > - 1 page 3: same for LFB > > - 1 page 3 and 2 page 6: modelling -> modeling > > - 1 page 3 (multiple), 2 page 5 (twice) and 9.2 page 26 : Cilc -> Cilk > (BTW the reference and wikipedia say Cilk :-) > > - 1 page 3: bad wording: > "Being an experimental document the LFB Class IDs cannot be included..." > > - 1.2 page 3: FE itself should be in the list (likely the first item) > > - 1.2 page 3: same for CE... > > - 2 page 5: e.g. -> e.g., > > - 2.1 page 8, 4.3.3 page 15 and 5 page 17: (not a US vs UK sp!) > LFBParallelOccurenceLimit -> LFBParallelOccurrenceLimit > > - 4.2.2 page 14: what is the MergeWaitTimeoutTimer unit? > (if the answer is not trivial it should be added in the document) > > - 8 page 25: parallezation -> parallelization > > - Authors' Addresses: please add USA (not US as postal addresses > require country names, not ISO IS 3166 codes (BTW VA is a valid > 3166 code but English is not one of its official languages even > wikipedia doesn't seem to have a very clear idea about them :-)). > > Regards > > [email protected] > > _______________________________________________ > Gen-art mailing list > [email protected] > https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/gen-art
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