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Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments you may receive. Document: draft-ietf-kitten-cammac-00 Reviewer: Meral Shirazipour Review Date: 2014-11-29 IETF LC End Date: 2014-12-09 IESG Telechat date: NA Summary: This draft is ready to be published as Standards Track RFC but I have some comments . Minor issues: Nits/editorial comments: [Page 1], Abstract section, please remove the duplication of the word abstract (first word of first sentence). [Page 1], Abstract, suggestion: the actual motivation should be briefly mentioned in the abstract. (e.g. that AD-KDC-ISSUED is not sufficient in cases where ...). [Page 3], "The svc-verifier element of the CAMMAC", is svc newly introduced in this draft? If so it would be clearer to mention it, e.g. "The new svc-verifier element of the CAMMAC" [Page 3], same sentence as above, should it be "AD-CAMMAC" instead of "CAMMAC" ? [Page 3], "svc-verifier", does svc acronym stand for something? (service and the Key Distribution Center ? ) Both svc and should be spelled out at first use. [Page 6], Section 5, if an Application server does not recognize the AD-CAMMAC container and the latter was not enclosed in the AD-IF-RELEVENT, should the Application server send an error or ignore ? Best Regards, Meral --- Meral Shirazipour Ericsson Research www.ericsson.com
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