On 29.7.2015, at 11.25, Meral Shirazipour <[email protected]> 
wrote:
> I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. For background on Gen-ART, 
> please see the FAQ athttp://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq.

Thank you for the review. This response notes the changes incorporated in -09 
version (that relate to this review).

> Nits/editorial comments:
> 
>  
> 
> -Abstract, suggestion:
> 
> “uses Trickle"---->"uses the Trickle algorithm"

Fixed.

>  
> 
> -Abstract, suggestion:
> 
> “DNCP is an abstract protocol, that"---->"DNCP is an abstract protocol, and"

Fixed.

> 
> -[Page 3], Intro, last paragraph the terms "infrequently" and "As the network 
> of nodes, or the rate of data changes grows over a given time interval"
> 
> it would be good to give example values or ranges to better describe what is 
> meant by these terms.

Given abstractness of the protocol, it is not really possible (different 
applications, orders of magnitude different timers; we see that already in 
use). However, we added applicability (statement) subsection to the 
introduction in which we provide some math about what sort of applications DNCP 
is suitable for which covers this I believe.

> -[Page 3], “specifies transport method"---->"specifies the transport method"

Text changed based on another review, n/a.

> -[Page 10], “higher then"---->"higher than"

Fixed.

> -[Page 28], “Certifcate"---->"Certificate"

Fixed.

> -Please consider adding caption and title to all figures.

As all figures we have are in their own individual sub-sections that are 
essentially caption/title for the related figure as well, the authors chose not 
to.

Is there some reason (e.g. a tool?) that would benefit from this?

Cheers,

-Markus

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