Re-send with correct IETF tools e-mail address. From: Gen-art [mailto:[email protected]] On Behalf Of Christer Holmberg Sent: 17. syyskuuta 2015 10:56 To: [email protected] Cc: [email protected] Subject: [Gen-art] Gen-ART review of draft-ietf-v6ops-siit-dc-02
I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. For background on Gen-ART, please see the FAQ at <http://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq> Document: draft-ietf-v6ops-siit-dc-02.txt Reviewer: Christer Holmberg Review Date: 17 September 2015 IETF LC End Date: 22 September 2015 IETF Telechat Date: N/A Summary: The document is well written, and almost ready for publication. However, there are a few editorial nits that I ask the author to address. Major Issues: None Minor Issues: None Editorial Issues: Section 1 (Introduction): --------------------------------- Q1_1: In a few places the 'BR' abbreviation is used, but it is not enhanced until section 2. Please enhance on first occurrence in section 1. Q1_2: In a few places the 'BR' abbreviation is used, but it is not enhanced until section 2. Please enhance on first occurrence in section 1. The text says: "o To ensure that that the legacy users' IPv4 addresses remain visible to the nodes and applications." ...and: "This ensures that there is no loss of information; the end-user's IPv4 source address remains available to the application, allowing" It may be obvious, but would it be possible to somehow make it more clear that the text is not (I assume) talking about the application running on the IPv4 node, but an application running in an IPv6 network? In other parts of the document it is more clear. E.g. in section 3.1 the text says: "application running on the IPv6-only server", Section 6 (IANA Considerations): ---------------------------------------- Q6_1: Do we normally remove the section if there are no requests from IANA? Personally I prefer to keep the explicit "This draft makes no request of the IANA." sentence.
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