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Document:
draft-ietf-ccamp-flexible-grid-rsvp-te-ext-03.txt
Reviewer: Christer Holmberg
Review Date: 29 October 2015
IETF LC End Date: 9 November 2015
IETF Telechat Date: N/A
Summary: The document is well written, and
almost ready for publication. However, I have a few editorial issue that I'd
like the authors to address.
Major Issues: None
Minor Issues: None
Editorial Issues:
Q1:
'RSVP-TE' is expanded in the Abstract, but not in the main document. Please
expand on first occurrence also in the Introduction (last paragraph).
Same comment applies to 'LSP'.
Q2:
There is no reference for RSVP-TE.
Q3:
Would it be possible to replace the last paragraph of the Introduction with the
Abstract text?
Q4:
Does 'GMPLS' need to be expanded on first occurrence?
Q5:
There is no reference to 'GMPLS' in sections 1 and 3.
Q6:
The text in section 7 says:
"This section records the status of known implementations of the
protocol defined by this specification at the time of posting of
this Internet-Draft,..."
I am not sure whether we should use "Internet-Draft" terminology in a published
RFC, and I am not sure what time "at the time of posting of this
Internet-Draft" refers to.
Perhaps you could say something like:
"This section records the status of known implementations of the
protocol defined by this specification at the time of writing the
specification,..."
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