Hi Elwyn,

Thank you for the review. The nits will be fixed in the next version.

BR,
Rachel


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> From: Elwyn Davies [mailto:[email protected]]
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> Document: draft-ietf-xrblock-rtcp-xr-video-lc-05
> Reviewer: Elwyn Davies
> Review Date: 2015/12/14
> IETF LC End Date: 2015-12-04
> IESG Telechat date: (if known) 2015-12-17
> 
> Summary: Ready with nits, primarily a number of acronyms needing expansion.
> 
> Major issues:
> None
> 
> Minor issues:
> None
> 
> Nits/editorial comments:
> Abstract: Need to expand RTCP (to RTP Control Protocol) and XR (Extended
> Reports).
> 
> s1, para 2: Need to expand QoE.
> 
> s1.2: s/RTP Monitoring Architectures [RFC6792]/RTP Monitoring Framework
> [RFC6792]/
> 
> s1.3:
> OLD
>     These metrics are applicable to video applications the video
>     component of Audio/Video applications using RTP and applying packet
>     loss concealment mechanisms which are incorporated into the receiving
>     endpoint to mitigate the impact of network impairments on QoE.
> NEW:
>     These metrics are applicable to video applications and the video
>     component of Audio/Video applications using RTP that apply packet
>     loss concealment mechanisms incorporated into the receiving
>     endpoint to mitigate the impact of network impairments on QoE.
> END
> 
> s1.3: Need to expand IPTV.
> 
> s3, item b: Need to expand IDR;
>                     s/Using inter-frame extrapolation/Using the
> inter-frame extrapolation/
> 
> s3, item d: s/so that receiver/so that the receiver/
> 
> s3, last para: s/methods slightly different/methods to be slightly different/
> 
> s4, para 1: Need to expand SSRC.
> 
> s4, duration fields:  It would useful to insert a reference to the place where
> the RTP timestamp units are defined.
> 
> s7.1: should refer back to s4 for the definition of VLC.
> 
> s7.2: should refer back to s5 for the definition of video-loss-concealment.
> 

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