Thanks for your review, and good questions, Christer. Authors, I have not seen a response or a new version. What’s up?
Jari On 07 May 2016, at 17:48, Christer Holmberg <[email protected]> wrote: > > I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. For background on Gen-ART, > please see the FAQ at > <http://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq> > > Document: draft-ietf-dime-e2e-sec-req-04 > Reviewer: Christer Holmberg > Review Date: 7 May 2016 > IETF LC End Date: 12 April 2016 > IETF Telechat Date: N/A > Summary: The document is well written, > and almost ready for publication is informational RFC. However, I have a few > editorial issues, related to the Introduction, that I ask the authors to > address. > Major Issues: None > Minor Issues: None > Editorial Issues: > > Q_ABSTRACT_1: > > The text says that the draft “discusses” requirements. In my opinion it > should say “defines” or “specifies”. > > > Q_INTRODUCTION_1: > > Please add references for TLS (for TCP) and DTLS (for SCTP). > > > Q_INTRODUCTION_2: > > The text says: “…or alternative security mechanisms independent of Diameter > (e.g., IPsec) is used.” > > 2A: I guess it should be “are used”? > > 2B: I am not sure I understand what “independent of Diameter” means. > > > Q_INTRODUCTION_3: > > The text talks about security between non-neighbour nodes, while the draft > name includes “e2e”. However, when reading Section 4, non-neighbour does not > necessarily mean end-to-end. I think it would be good to explicitly clarify > that in the Introduction. > > > Q_INTRODUCTION_4: > > The text says: “This document collects requirements for developing a solution > to protect Diameter AVPs.” > > 2A: It needs to be clear that it’s about protecting AVPs between > non-neighbour nodes. > > 2B: Instead of “collect”, please use the same terminology as in the Abstract. > > > Q_INTRODUCTION_5: > > Please enhance AVP on first occurrence. Currently it’s not done > until Section 3. > > _______________________________________________ > Gen-art mailing list > [email protected] > https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/gen-art
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