I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. The General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) reviews all IETF documents being processed by the IESG for the IETF Chair. Please treat these comments just like any other last call comments.
For more information, please see the FAQ at <http://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq>. Document: draft-ietf-core-http-mapping-13.txt Reviewer: Francis Dupont Review Date: 20160829 IETF LC End Date: 20160822 IESG Telechat date: unknown Summary: Ready Major issues: None Minor issues: None Nits/editorial comments: - Abstract page 1: please expand the CoAP abbrev at first use. - ToC page 3 and 11 page 29: Acknowledgements -> Acknowledgments - 1 page 3: again please expand the CoAP abbrev at first use. - 3 page 6, 5.4.2 page 12, 5.5 page 13, and 7 note 4 page 22: i.e. -> i.e., - 5.3 page 9 (twice), 5.4.2 page 12, 6.2 page 16, 6.2 page 17 (3 times), 6.6 Fig 2 page 19, 7 note 7 page 22, 8.3 page 24, and 10.2 page 28: e.g. -> e.g., - 5.4.1.1 page 10: IMHO the 1. Target CoAP URI ... should be on the next page (BTW leave this to the RFC Editor). - 5.4.2.1 page 12: same comment about "2. Target CoAP URI ..." - 5.4.2.1 page 13: perhaps a missing "on" at the end of: http://p.example.com/hc/?s=coap&hp=s.example.com&p=/light&q= Regards [email protected] _______________________________________________ Gen-art mailing list [email protected] https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/gen-art
