Thanks for the review, Ralph, and for taking care of the edits, Lucy! Jari
On 06 Jan 2017, at 17:46, Lucy yong <[email protected]> wrote: > Hi Ralph, > > Thank you for the review. We will have all acronyms expansion in next version > and add a reference for DC services. > > Regards, > Lucy > > -----Original Message----- > From: Gen-art [mailto:[email protected]] On Behalf Of Ralph Droms > Sent: Friday, January 06, 2017 7:14 AM > To: [email protected] > Cc: [email protected]; [email protected]; [email protected] > Subject: [Gen-art] Review of draft-ietf-nvo3-use-case-15 > > Reviewer: Ralph Droms > Review result: Ready with Nits > > I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. The General Area Review > Team (Gen-ART) reviews all IETF documents being processed by the IESG for the > IETF Chair. Please treat these comments just like any other last call > comments. > > For more information, please see the FAQ at > > <https://trac.ietf.org/trac/gen/wiki/GenArtfaq>. > > Document: draft-ietf-nvo3-use-case-?? > Reviewer: Ralph Droms > Review Date: 2017-01-06 > IETF LC End Date: 2017-01-11 > IESG Telechat date: 2017-01-19 > > Summary: This draft is ready for publication as an Informational RFC. > > Major issues: None > > Minor issues: None > > Nits/editorial comments: > > I found several acronyms that did not have expansions. I recommend a pass > over the document for unexpanded acronyms.. > > Section 2: What is "broadcast/unknown" traffic (spec. "unknown"?); please > expand the acronym "BUM". > The paragraph that begins with "One NVO3 network [...]" is indented > differently from the rest of the text. Intentional or a typo? > > Section 3.2: An illustrating figure for the use case described in this > section would be helpful. > Expand acronyms "PE" and "ABSR". > I found the text using "Option A" and "Option B" confusing. Exactly what > are those options? > > Section 5: I didn't understand the references to IaaS, PaaS and SaaS in the > summary - there are no references to those services in the body of the > document, or back pointers from the summary to relevant preceding text. > > _______________________________________________ > Gen-art mailing list > [email protected] > https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/gen-art >
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