Hi Jari
I’ll review the comments and respond to them.
Thanks,
Bill Cerveny
On 2/16/17, 7:47 AM, "Jari Arkko" <jari.ar...@piuha.net> wrote:
Thanks for the detailed review, Francis!
Authors — did you make a note of the comments? Did not see a response…
Jari
On 24 Jan 2017, at 18:33, Francis Dupont <francis.dup...@fdupont.fr> wrote:
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> Document: draft-ietf-bmwg-ipv6-nd-04.txt
> Reviewer: Francis Dupont
> Review Date: 20170116
> IETF LC End Date: 20170123
> IESG Telechat date: unknown
>
> Summary: Ready with nits
>
> Major issues: none
>
> Minor issues: the title (and the Abstract) is a bit misleading: it is
> not the benchmarking of the ND protocol which has ~12 different
> functions but the benchmarking of a particular function on a router.
> Now it is the critical one so my concern is more the document is
> limited to only this one...
>
> Nits/editorial comments:
> - ToC page 2 and 7 page 12: Acknowledgements -> Acknowledgments
>
> - 1 page 2: the limit to a router explains why the verb send is
> replaced by forward... and why there is nothing about redirection
>
> - 1 page 2: determine the IPv6 next-hop's link-layer address
> -> determine the outgoing interface and the IPv6 next-hop's
> link-layer address
>
> - 2.2.1 page 5: et cetera -> etc
>
> - 3.1.2 page 9 (twice) and 3.2.2 page 10; recieved -> received
>
> - 3.1.2 page 9: IMHO you should define the "initial" term (for final
> the meaning is obvious)
>
> - 3.2.1 page 10: (i.e.,IPv6 -> (i.e., IPv6
>
> - 3.2.2 page 10: in "packets-received will either be
> equal to zero or packets-received." the last received -> sent.
>
> Regards
>
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