Thanks for the review and detailed read! > Am 02.09.2017 um 03:14 schrieb Peter Yee <[email protected]>: > > Reviewer: Peter Yee > Review result: Ready with Issues > > I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. The General Area > Review Team (Gen-ART) reviews all IETF documents being processed > by the IESG for the IETF Chair. Please treat these comments just > like any other last call comments. > > For more information, please see the FAQ at > > <https://trac.ietf.org/trac/gen/wiki/GenArtfaq>. > > Document: draft-ietf-mpls-ldp-mrt-06 > Reviewer: Peter Yee > Review Date: 2017-09-01 > IETF LC End Date: 2017-09-01 > IESG Telechat date: 2017-09-14 > > Summary: The draft is ready for publication after correcting some minor > issues. > > Major issues: None > > Minor issues: > > Page 3, section 3, IBR definition: the definition give here appears to be a > duplicate of the one given for IN. Copy the correct definition from RFC 7812 > instead. > > Nits/editorial comments: > > Page 3, section 1, 2nd paragraph, 1st sentence: append a comma after "e.g.". > > Page 8, section 4.4., 1st paragraph, 2nd sentence: delete duplicate "on". > > Page 8, section 4.4, 2nd paragraph, 4th sentence: change comma after > "computations" to a period. > > Page 9, section 5.1.1, 4th paragraph, 2nd sentence: the construction > "red(blue)" is used without defining what it means exactly. From the context, > it isn't quite "red or blue". An explanation of the meaning of this > construction should be given. I'm assuming it means something like use "red" > in the sentence in all cases or use use "blue", but don't mix them. There's > also red/blue used later in the document which muddies the point. > > Page 10, 1st full paragraph, 2nd sentence: change "foll" to "follows:". > > Page 11, section 5.2.2, 2nd paragraph, 1st sentence: delete the period after > "A.1.7". > > Page 12, 1st paragraph, 1st sentence: consider deleting "how". > > Page 13, 2nd paragraph after numbered list, 1st sentence: append "to" after > "respect". > > Section titles for 5.2, 5.3, and 7: append a space after "RFC" to separate it > from the number. The spaceless form should only be used for references > enclosed in brackets. > > _______________________________________________ > Gen-art mailing list > [email protected] > https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/gen-art
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