Thanks Meral, we'll make these edits in the working version. Kathleen and Al
From: Meral Shirazipour [mailto:meral.shirazip...@ericsson.com] Sent: Friday, January 26, 2018 8:32 PM To: draft-mm-wg-effect-encrypt....@ietf.org; gen-art@ietf.org Subject: Gen-ART Telechat Call review of draft-mm-wg-effect-encrypt-15 I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. The General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) reviews all IETF documents being processed by the IESG for the IETF Chair. Please wait for direction from your document shepherd or AD before posting a new version of the draft. For more information, please see the FAQ at <http://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq><https://urldefense.proofpoint.com/v2/url?u=http-3A__wiki.tools.ietf.org_area_gen_trac_wiki_GenArtfaq-253E&d=DwQFAg&c=LFYZ-o9_HUMeMTSQicvjIg&r=OfsSu8kTIltVyD1oL72cBw&m=sWfwhEulYHN7F-HqzfSmxg30PDwIdzHEJzBX847Tydo&s=WMK_psXzG78XKTPKkxKERL8jUGz2kjGQQ6zfYyuLdMs&e=>. Document: draft-mm-wg-effect-encrypt-15 Reviewer: Meral Shirazipour Review Date: 2018-01-26 IETF LC End Date: 2017-12-04 IESG Telechat date: 2018-02-08 Summary: This draft is ready to be published as Informational RFC . Major issues: Minor issues: Nits/editorial comments: -few occurrences: "pervassive"--->"pervasive" -[Page 6], Sec 1.1, "were were built "---->"were built " -[Page 12] , "scaleability"--->"scalability" x2 -[Page 16] , "unaccessible"--->"inaccessible" -[Page 29] ,"depening"--->"depending", "permited"--->"permitted " -[Page 31], "rasises"---->"raises", "encyption"---->"encryption", "visibilty"--->"visibility" Best Regards, Meral --- Meral Shirazipour Ericsson Research www.ericsson.com<https://urldefense.proofpoint.com/v2/url?u=http-3A__www.ericsson.com&d=DwQFAg&c=LFYZ-o9_HUMeMTSQicvjIg&r=OfsSu8kTIltVyD1oL72cBw&m=sWfwhEulYHN7F-HqzfSmxg30PDwIdzHEJzBX847Tydo&s=MAj9Fo89l-_oT0aSL2s-T7OEaU6j9LXukSDw-0rW2G0&e=>
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