Reviewer: Matthew Miller Review result: Ready with Nits I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. The General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) reviews all IETF documents being processed by the IESG for the IETF Chair. Please treat these comments just like any other last call comments.
For more information, please see the FAQ at <https://trac.ietf.org/trac/gen/wiki/GenArtfaq>. Document: draft-ietf-trill-over-ip-15 Reviewer: Matthew A. Miller Review Date: 2018-03-07 IETF LC End Date: 2018-03-06 IESG Telechat date: 2018-03-08 Summary: Ready with nits Major issues: NONE Minor issues: NONE Nits/editorial comments: * In Section 4.5. "TRILL Over IP Transport IS-IS SubNetwork Point of Attachment", the word "of" between "" """ The Hellos transmitted out [of] a port indicate what neighbor ports that port can see on the link by listing what IS-IS refers to as the neighbor port's SubNetwork Point of Attachment (SNPA) """ * In Section 5.2. "Encapsulation Agreement", the first sentence is difficult to understand; I think it is missing the word "on" between "sent out" and "a TRILL over IP": """ TRILL Hellos sent out [on] a TRILL over IP transport port indicate the encapsulations for which that port is offering full support through a mechanism initially specified in [RFC7178] and [RFC7176] that is hereby extended. """ * In Section 5.4. "Native Encapsulation", the word "he" should be "the" in the sentence "Where he UDP Header is as follows". * In Section 5.6.1. "TCP Connection Establishment", the word "connections" should be singular (or the leading "a" dropped) in the fragment "try to establish a TCP connections to each of them". * In Section 5.6.1. "TCP Connection Establishment", the occurrence of "P!" should be changed to "P1". _______________________________________________ Gen-art mailing list Genfirstname.lastname@example.org https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/gen-art