Matt, thanks for your review. Jordi, thanks for your responses. I entered a DISCUSS ballot concerning the use of capitalized keywords.
Alissa > On Jan 2, 2019, at 10:29 PM, Matthew Miller <[email protected]> > wrote: > > Reviewer: Matthew Miller > Review result: Ready with Nits > > I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. The General Area > Review Team (Gen-ART) reviews all IETF documents being processed > by the IESG for the IETF Chair. Please treat these comments just > like any other last call comments. > > For more information, please see the FAQ at > > <https://trac.ietf.org/trac/gen/wiki/GenArtfaq>. > > Document: draft-ietf-v6ops-transition-ipv4aas-12 > Reviewer: Matthew A. Miller > Review Date: 2019-01-02 > IETF LC End Date: 2018-12-14 > IESG Telechat date: 2019-01-10 > > Summary: This document is ready to be published as Informational, > but has some nits that should be addressed before publication. > > Major issues: N/A > > Minor issue: > > There are some instances within the main content that RFC 2119 > keywords are present as lower case. If these are intentional, then > RFC 8174 needs to be applied. > > Nits/editorial comments: > > * In section 1. "Introduction" (and its subsections), the term "IPv6 > Transition CE Router" is not preceded with a definite or indefinite > article, although it is throughout the rest of this document. > * In section 1. "Introduction", the phrase "prohibitive expense" > ought to be "prohibitively expensive". > * In section 7. "Code Considerations", the word "neither" might be > better as "nor" in the phrase "in terms of RAM memory, neither > other hardware requirements". > * In section 7. "Code Considerations", there seems to be a misplaced > coma; "cost of NAT44 code so, existing hardware supports them with > minimal impact" reads better as "cost of NAT44 code, so existing > hardware supports them with minimal impact". > * In section 11. "Annex A: Usage Scenarios", the comma seems > unneeded in the phrase "another CE behind it, takes care of that". > * In section 12. "Annex B: End-User Network Architecture", the > term "end-user" should be used consistently, it is sometimes > "end user". > > > _______________________________________________ > Gen-art mailing list > [email protected] > https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/gen-art _______________________________________________ Gen-art mailing list [email protected] https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/gen-art
