Christer, thank you for your review. Robbie and Greg, thanks for your responses. I entered a No Objection ballot.
Alissa > On Mar 6, 2019, at 4:01 PM, Robbie Harwood <[email protected]> wrote: > > Christer Holmberg <[email protected] > <mailto:[email protected]>> writes: > >> Reviewer: Christer Holmberg >> Review result: Ready with Issues >> >> I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. The General Area >> Review Team (Gen-ART) reviews all IETF documents being processed >> by the IESG for the IETF Chair. Please treat these comments just >> like any other last call comments. >> >> For more information, please see the FAQ at >> >> <https://trac.ietf.org/trac/gen/wiki/GenArtfaq>. >> >> Document: draft-ietf-kitten-pkinit-alg-agility-05 >> Reviewer: Christer Holmberg >> Review Date: 2019-03-01 >> IETF LC End Date: 2019-02-17 >> IESG Telechat date: 2019-03-07 >> >> Summary: The draft needs to be more clear on how RFC 4556 is updated. >> >> Major issues: None >> >> Minor issues: >> >> Q1: >> >> For the unfamiliar reader, it is unclear exactly how RFC 4556 is updated. >> There >> is e.g., no text indicating what sections of 4556 are updated, and there is >> no >> "Updates to RFC 4556" section. >> >> I assume the remainder of the draft then updates RFC 4556, but I think it >> needs >> to be more clear for the unfamiliar reader. >> >> Even if a "Updates to RFC 4556" section would not be feasible, the document >> should indicate what parts/sections of 4556 are updated, and what sections in >> the draft defines those updates. >> >> Nits/editorial comments: >> >> Q2: >> >> Both the Abstract and the Introduction start with "This document updates >> PKINIT,..." >> >> I think it would be good to first give some background information on the >> issue(s), and then state that the document fixes those issues by updating RFC >> 4556. > > Hi Christer, thanks for your review. > > Greg has created and uploaded a new version (-06) to the tracker that > hopefully addresses your concerns. > > Thanks, > --Robbie > _______________________________________________ > Gen-art mailing list > [email protected] <mailto:[email protected]> > https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/gen-art > <https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/gen-art>
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