Reviewer: Elwyn Davies Review result: Ready with Nits I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. The General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) reviews all IETF documents being processed by the IESG for the IETF Chair. Please treat these comments just like any other last call comments.
For more information, please see the FAQ at <https://trac.ietf.org/trac/gen/wiki/GenArtfaq>. Document: draft-ietf-iasa2-rfc7437bis-05 Reviewer: Elwyn Davies Review Date: 2019-06-20 IETF LC End Date: 2019-06-21 IESG Telechat date: Not scheduled for a telechat Summary: Ready with nits Major Issues: None Minor Issues: s3.2, para 1 and para 7: I feel the phrase 'superior candidate' is rather demeaning to an incumbent who may have served with distinction. Suggest in para 1 s/a superior candidate/an alternative candidate/. In para 7 s/A superior candidate is one who the NomCom believes/The nominated candidate selected for each open position by theNomCom, whether incumbent or alternative, is the one that they believe/ Nits and Editorials: s2, Confirmed Candidate: s/that has been/who has been/ (for consistency with Candidate) s3.2, para 1: s/its incumbent/its incumbent, assuming that the incumbent has indicated willingness to continue in post,/ s3.2, para 2: Section 5.4 of draft-ietf-iasa2-rfc4071bis-04 indicates that there are term limits for the IETF LLC board positions and Section 2 of draft-ietf-iasa2-trust-update-02 indicates there are term limits for IETF Trust positions. s3.3, para 3: s/is selected/are selected/ s3.7.1: The summaries of expertise need to be made public to facilitate candidate's ability to address the requirements in their submissions to the NomCom and for others to make appropriate comments on candidates. _______________________________________________ Gen-art mailing list Gen-art@ietf.org https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/gen-art
