Francis, thank you for your review. I entered a No Objection ballot. Alissa
> On May 13, 2019, at 8:47 AM, Francis Dupont <[email protected]> wrote: > > I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. The General Area > Review Team (Gen-ART) reviews all IETF documents being processed > by the IESG for the IETF Chair. Please treat these comments just > like any other last call comments. > > For more information, please see the FAQ at > > <https://trac.ietf.org/trac/gen/wiki/GenArtfaq>. > > Document: Ready > Reviewer: Francis Dupont > Review Date: 2019/05/11 > IETF LC End Date: 2019/05/21 > IESG Telechat date: unknown > > Summary: Ready > > Major issues: None > > Minor issues: None > > Nits/editorial comments: > - ToC page 2: bad padding in 2. and 2.1. titles in text format. > > - ToC page 2 and many other places: there is a problem with the > "acknowledgement" word spelling: correct spelling is "acknowledgment" > but the term is used both in the protocol including in the ToC and > in the document for its acknowledgments usual section. > > I propose if the other protocol documents use the UK "acknowledgement" > spelling to keep it for similar usages. In all cases the section title > should be in US spelling so Acknowledgments. > > - 4.1 page 7, 4.4 5. page 12 and A.1 5. page 18: i.e. -> i.e., > > - 4.3.1 page 10: atleast -> at least > > - 4.3.3 page 10: seqeunce -> sequence > > - 4.5.2 page 12: signalling -> signaling > > - 5 page 14 title: Acknowledgements -> Acknowledgments > > - from 6 page 14 to 6.3 page 16: Acknowledgement -> Acknowledgment > > - 6.1, 6.2 and 6.3 pages 15 and 16: there is a problem with the textual > rendering of qualities: I got "oBit number..." without a space between > the "o" and the entry name "Bit number". > > - authors page 21: please consider China -> PR China or simply move > from country names to ISO IS 3166 2 letter codes (for instance > France -> FR)? > > Regards > > [email protected] > > PS: as they are mostly aesthetic points there is no need to address them > by a new draft and BTW the RFC Editor can handle them. > > _______________________________________________ > Gen-art mailing list > [email protected] > https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/gen-art _______________________________________________ Gen-art mailing list [email protected] https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/gen-art
