Francis, thanks for your review. Pascal, thanks for making the changes. I entered a No Objection ballot.
Alissa > On Jul 2, 2019, at 9:08 AM, Pascal Thubert (pthubert) <pthub...@cisco.com> > wrote: > > Hello Francis > > Many thanks for your review. It clearly indicates a thorough reading, this is > much appreciated. > I fixed all the nits in -24. Please see nbelow: > >> - 1 page 3: the IT abbrev is not introduced >> >> - 2.1 page 5 (bundle), page 9 (slotOffset), 4.61 page 38 (2.): i.e. -> i.e., >> >> - 2.1 page 6 (chunk): missing closing parenthesis >> > All done > >> - 2.1 page 9 (Track): the text says the root is the destination. IMHO >> the DODAG has an unique leaf which is the destination? > > Well, no, the traffic comes from the leaves to the root. Arguable from any > node in the DODAG but then the schedule must make sure there is no collision > if there are multiple sources. > What's unique is the root, that's the DO in DODAG > >> >> - 3.1 page 12: please expand the PCE abbrev here (first occurrence, >> note the expansion is in 3.3. page 15: you can move or duplicate it). >> >> - 3.2 page 14: the 6LBR ... need -> needs >> >> - 4.2.2 pafge 25 figure 6: there are multiple arrows for the RS. I believe >> it is a way to figure multicasting? >> >> - 4.3.1.1 page 27, 4.3.3 page 29, 4.5.3 page 35 (3 times), 4.7.1.2 page 42: >> e.g. -> e.g., >> >> - 4.6 page 37: >> one or more destination(s) 6TiSCH node(s) >> -> >> one or more destination 6TiSCH nodes >> > > All done > >> Spelling: >> - 1 page 3: undated -> updated > > Replaced by "without a date" > >> - 4.1.1 page 21: settig -> setting >> - 4.3.3. page 29: infoirmation -> information >> - 4.3.3 page 29: behaviour -> behavior >> - 4.4 page 33: multithop -> multihop >> - 4.7.1.1 page 42: dependant -> dependent >> - 7.1 page 51: implementaton -> implementation >> - A page 60 (PAW): Predicatable -> Predictable >> >> At the exception of the DODAG root in Track definition there is nothing which >> can't be done by the RFC Editor so could require a new version. >> > > All cool, publishing 24. > > Many thanks Francis! > > _______________________________________________ > Gen-art mailing list > Gen-art@ietf.org > https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/gen-art _______________________________________________ Gen-art mailing list Gen-art@ietf.org https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/gen-art
