Russ - Thanx for the careful review. I have uploaded V5 of the draft which addresses your comments subject to my responses inline.
> -----Original Message----- > From: Russ Housley via Datatracker <nore...@ietf.org> > Sent: Thursday, August 15, 2019 2:38 PM > To: gen-art@ietf.org > Cc: draft-ietf-lsr-isis-rfc5306bis....@ietf.org; i...@ietf.org; l...@ietf.org > Subject: Genart last call review of draft-ietf-lsr-isis-rfc5306bis-04 > > Reviewer: Russ Housley > Review result: Ready with Nits > > I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. The General Area > Review Team (Gen-ART) reviews all IETF documents being processed > by the IESG for the IETF Chair. Please treat these comments just > like any other last call comments. > > For more information, please see the FAQ at > <http://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq>. > > Document: draft-ietf-lsr-isis-rfc5306bis-04 > Reviewer: Russ Housley > Review Date: 2019-08-15 > IETF LC End Date: 2019-08-27 > IESG Telechat date: Unknown > > Summary: Ready with Nits > > Major Concerns: > > None > > > Minor Concerns: > > None > > > Nits: > > Section 3.2.3: The lettered paragraphs at the top of the section > begin with lower case letters, but the lettered paragraphs at the > top of the section begin with upper case letters. Please be > consistent. > [Les:] Done > Section 3.2.3: s/time after which the adjacency will now expire/ > /time after which the adjacency will expire/ > [Les:] I left this unchanged. The text is identical to text in Section 3.2.1 regarding the RA bit. The point of using "now expire" is to emphasize that the expiration time has been adjusted as a result of the RR/PR request. Hope this is OK with you. > Section 3.2.3 says: > > ... It > is therefore useful to signal a planned restart (if the forwarding > plane on the restarting router is maintained) so that ... > > I suggest: > > ... If > the forwarding plane on the restarting router is maintained, it > is useful to signal a planned restart so that ... [Les:] I rewrote this paragraph. The term "restart" has been defined in Section 2 to be associated with a control plane restart which involves maintenance of the forwarding plane - so some of the text was redundant. I hope the revised text is both more readable and more precise. Les _______________________________________________ Gen-art mailing list Gen-art@ietf.org https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/gen-art
