Hi Christer, Thanks for your comments. For your information, this document is just a revision of RFC5549, so 99,9% of the text is just copy/paste from the existing RFC. Of course, we can improve things.
I'll take care of your comments for a next revision. For the IANA section, as IANA will not have any action, I would prefer keeping the existing text from RFC5549. We can also let other people comment on that point. Stephane -----Original Message----- From: Christer Holmberg via Datatracker <nore...@ietf.org> Sent: vendredi 10 juillet 2020 00:17 To: gen-art@ietf.org Cc: draft-ietf-bess-rfc5549revision....@ietf.org; last-c...@ietf.org; b...@ietf.org Subject: Genart last call review of draft-ietf-bess-rfc5549revision-04 Reviewer: Christer Holmberg Review result: Almost Ready I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. The General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) reviews all IETF documents being processed by the IESG for the IETF Chair. Please treat these comments just like any other last call comments. For more information, please see the FAQ at <https://trac.ietf.org/trac/gen/wiki/GenArtfaq>. Document: draft-ietf-bess-rfc5549revision-04 Reviewer: Christer Holmberg Review Date: 2020-07-09 IETF LC End Date: 2020-07-21 IESG Telechat date: Not scheduled for a telechat Summary: The document is well written, and almost ready for publication. I only have a couple of editorial nits. Major issues: N/A Minor issues: N/A Nits/editorial comments: Q1. In the Abstract, I suggest the split the text into 2 paragrahps, where the "This document specifies..." sentence is the beginning of the second paragraph. Q2. In the Introduction section, in the last paragraph, instead of saying "This document specifies the extensions necessary to do so." I suggest to be explicit about what the document specifies - similar to the Abstract. Q3. The document uses "IPvX Network Layer Protocol" and "IPvX Protocol" terminology. Similarly, the document uses "IPvX" and "IPvX Address" terminology. Unless there is a good reason, I suggest do double check whether the terminology can be more consistent. Q4. In the IANA Considerations section, I suggest to use the IANA registry table format, where the different values (Value, Description and Reference) are indicated, e.g., as in Section 7 of RFC 8654. Also similar to 8654, please indicate the IANA registry name. _______________________________________________ Gen-art mailing list Gen-art@ietf.org https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/gen-art
