Hi David, Thanks for your review and please check in-line below.
On Sat, 13 Nov 2021 at 00:27, David Schinazi via Datatracker < nore...@ietf.org> wrote: > Reviewer: David Schinazi > Review result: Ready with Issues > > I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. The General Area > Review Team (Gen-ART) reviews all IETF documents being processed > by the IESG for the IETF Chair. Please treat these comments just > like any other last call comments. > > For more information, please see the FAQ at > <https://trac.ietf.org/trac/gen/wiki/GenArtfaq>. > > Document: draft-ietf-spring-segment-routing-policy-14 > Reviewer: David Schinazi > Review Date: 2021-11-12 > IETF LC End Date: 2021-11-24 > IESG Telechat date: Not scheduled for a telechat > > Summary: Well written document. A few minor issues which should be trivial > to > address. > > Major issues: None > > Minor issues: > - in s2.7, please specify if a higher number is more preferred or less > preferred > KT> Higher value is more preferred. This is specified in 2.9, but I agree it is better to also say so in 2.7. Will fix it in the next update. > - in s5.1, I would replace "A Segment-List of an explicit candidate path > MUST > be declared invalid when:" with "A Segment-List of an explicit candidate > path > MUST be declared invalid when any of the following is true:" (unless you > mean > "all of the following" > KT> Good catch. Indeed it is "any". Will fix it in the next update. > Nits/editorial comments: > - the term headend is never defined. If it's a term of art in this area > perhaps > a reference to the document that defines it would help? But if every > reader is > expected to know the term because of the required context then that might > be OK. > KT> It is a term that is expected to be known but I agree it is helpful to explain. I'll propose the following text in bold in the introduction: Segment Routing [RFC8402] allows a headend node to steer a packet flow along any path. *The headend is a node where the instructions for source routing (i.e. segments) are instantiated into the packet and hence becomes the starting node for a specific segment routing path.* Intermediate per-path states are eliminated thanks to source routing. Thanks, Ketan
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