Vijay, thank you for your review. I have entered a No Objection ballot for this document.
Lars > On Sep 22, 2022, at 18:19, Vijay Gurbani via Datatracker <[email protected]> > wrote: > > Reviewer: Vijay Gurbani > Review result: Ready with Issues > > I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. The General Area > Review Team (Gen-ART) reviews all IETF documents being processed > by the IESG for the IETF Chair. Please treat these comments just > like any other last call comments. > > For more information, please see the FAQ at > > <https://trac.ietf.org/trac/gen/wiki/GenArtfaq>. > > Document: draft-kucherawy-bcp97bis-?? > Reviewer: Vijay K. Gurbani > Review Date: 2022-09-22 > IETF LC End Date: 2022-10-17 > IESG Telechat date: Not scheduled for a telechat > > Summary: This document is "Ready with Issues" to be published as a BCP. > > Major issues: > > Minor issues: > - S1.1, first paragraph: "...subject matter in the RFC, ..." Here, does the > "RFC" refer to the document being considered for RFC status? Or does it refer > to the RFC in the normative reference? I think it is the former, and if so, > perhaps better to say "... subject matter in the RFC under consideration ..." > (or "document under consideration". or even "RFC-to-be"). You hint to this > dilemma later --- in S3, where you define "source" and "target" documents. > Another option would be to move S3 before S1 and use the "source" and "target" > terminology defined. - S1.1, top of page 4, first bullet ("If a protocol > relies..."): Perhaps better to say "If a RFC-to-be defines a protocol that > relies ..."? Or "If a target document defines a protocol that relies ...". > > Nits/editorial comments: > - S4.1: s/At the option of the author/editor/At the discretion of the > author/editor/ - S4.2: s/added to the "Downref Registry"./added to the > "Downref > Registry" (Section 7)./ > > Thanks, > > - vijay > > > _______________________________________________ > Gen-art mailing list > [email protected] > https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/gen-art
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