Hi Christer,
thank you for your kind consideration of our work and the helpful
suggestions. Please find my notes below tagged GIM>>.

Regards,
Greg

On Wed, Feb 11, 2026 at 3:09 AM Christer Holmberg via Datatracker <
[email protected]> wrote:

> Document: draft-ietf-ippm-asymmetrical-pkts
> Title: Performance Measurement with Asymmetrical Traffic Using Simple
> Two-Way
> Active Measurement Protocol (STAMP) Reviewer: Christer Holmberg Review
> result:
> Ready with Nits
>
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> Document: draft-ietf-ippm-asymmetrical-pkts-10
> Reviewer: Christer Holmberg
> Review Date: 2026-02-11
> IETF LC End Date: 2026-02-18
> IESG Telechat date: Not scheduled for a telechat
>
> Summary: The document is well written, and easy to understand. I only have
> a
> couple of editorial comments that I would like the authors to address.
>
> Major issues: N/A
>
> Minor issues: N/A
>
> Nits/editorial comments:
>
> Q1:
>
> The Abstract is far too long. I think it would be enough with something
> like:
>
> "This document specifies an optional extension to the Simple Two-way
> Active Measurement Protocol (STAMP) to control the length and/or
> number of packets sent by a Session-Reflector in response to a single
> test packet from the Session-Sender during a STAMP test session.
> This supports cases where a Session-Reflector responding with
> Asymmetrical Packets would ensure a closer approximation between
> active performance measurements and the conditions experienced by
> monitored application."
>
GIM>> Indeed, the Abstract is better when it is not too wordly. At the same
time, it would be helpful to a reader if terms used in the Abstract are
well-known. "Asymmetrical packets", in fact, is the term introduced in this
document. Perhaps is slightly different version of the Abstract would be
acceptable:
NEW TEXT:
   This document defines an optional STAMP extension that allows a
   Session-Reflector to send packets whose length or quantity differs
   from those sent by the Session-Sender.  While standard STAMP
   exchanges packets symmetrically, some measurement scenarios benefit
   from asymmetric response packets to better reflect real application
   conditions.  This extension enables the Session-Reflector to send
   packets of different sizes and/or additional packets not tied one-
   for-one to incoming test packets.  The document also analyzes
   challenges in multicast performance monitoring and specifies STAMP
   procedures to improve measurement efficiency and reduce network
   impact.

>
> Q2:
>
> In the Introduction, I suggest to put the current 1st chapter to the end.
> First
> describe what the draft does, and then how it does it.
>
GIM>> The first paragraph references RFC 7497, the Rate Measurement Test
Protocol Problem Statement and Requirements, in which the case for
asymmetrical performance measurement is formulated. The second paragraph of
the Introduction introduces "asymmetrical packets". Third paragraph -
refers to specific challenges of performance measurement, including rate
measurement, in a multicast environment. Considering that, would
maintaining the existing sequence of paragraphs be acceptable?
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