Hi, Thanks for the feedback.
> In general: the layout, with everything up at the top, suggests that > something is missing in the body of many slides. > Why is the 'Back' arrow in grey until you hover over it? Grey sort of > implies that the control is disabled. Not sure why it was done that way, but it’s the default for other presentations as well. I’d guess it's because you generally move forward through a presentation, or it might indicate “focus” as the space bar advances the presentation. > Slide > 1: should have the title of the presentation. The welcome message does not > look like a title, I’ll fix this later. > 3:: "...make ASF unique" should be "...make The ASF unique" . Same issue on > other slides. "The" is a formal part of the Foundation name, so we use it > when talking about the Foundation. We do not have to use it when it is an > adjective, as in "ASF values”. Fixed. > 7: "Red flags to watch" should be "Red flags to watch for" Done. > 17: "...Name to Promote Vendor Products" should be "...name to promote > vendor products" Done. > 32: "Votes enable consensus" is a debatable statement. Votes can end an > attempt to achieve consensus between factions that disagree on the best > thing to do on this issue. A vote can be used to confirm or record consensus, and that is more common than votes used to move forward when people disagree. Note "stress that votes record consensus” in the speaker notes. I’ve changed it to " Votes can record consensus”. > 41: "Due quarterly..." should be on its own line Fixed. > 44: what is "Repeated release"? Repeated release issues, i.e. a podling keeps making the same mistakes and not learning from release feedback. > 56 'One person doing all work" should be "One person doing all the work" Done. Kind Regards, Justin --------------------------------------------------------------------- To unsubscribe, e-mail: general-unsubscr...@incubator.apache.org For additional commands, e-mail: general-h...@incubator.apache.org
