Thanks!
DISCUSS cleared in anticipation of the github version being posted.  I
appreciate you folks addressing my comments.

Barry

On Tue, Jul 16, 2019 at 3:55 PM Tim Evens (tievens) <[email protected]> wrote:
>
> Hi Barry,
>
> Thanks for catching that.  PR 
> https://github.com/TimEvens/draft-ietf-grow-bmp-adj-rib-out/pull/14 should 
> correct this.  The rendered txt is 
> https://github.com/TimEvens/draft-ietf-grow-bmp-adj-rib-out/blob/iana_admin_label/draft-ietf-grow-bmp-adj-rib-out.txt
>
> Thanks,
> Tim
>
> On 7/16/19, 9:46 AM, "Barry Leiba" <[email protected]> wrote:
>
>     Thanks, Paolo: the updates take care of the DISCUSS and all but one of
>     the editorial comments.  It's a little hard to tell from the github
>     PR, but it looks like the extra text in Section 9.3 is still there
>     (after the addition of "byte"):
>
>     <<
>     The Information field contains a free-form UTF-8 string whose byte
>     length is given by the Information Length field. The value is
>     administratively given by the Information Length field. The value
>     is administratively assigned. There is no requirement to terminate
>     the string with null or any other character.
>     >>
>
>     The second sentence appears to be a paste error and shouldn't be there... 
> yes?
>
>     Thanks for addressing my comments!
>
>     Barry
>
>     On Tue, Jul 16, 2019 at 12:19 PM Paolo Lucente <[email protected]> wrote:
>     >
>     >
>     > Hi Barry,
>     >
>     > Thanks for your comments. I hope it is felt that the following edits 
> address them:
>     >
>     > 
> https://github.com/paololucente/draft-ietf-grow-bmp-adj-rib-out/commit/f3a9cb578d6f1a93c207f328f4f912c52cda6bcd
>     >
>     > Paolo
>     >
>     > On 10 Jul 2019, at 08:21, Barry Leiba via Datatracker 
> <[email protected]> wrote:
>     >
>     > Barry Leiba has entered the following ballot position for
>     > draft-ietf-grow-bmp-adj-rib-out-06: Discuss
>     >
>     > When responding, please keep the subject line intact and reply to all
>     > email addresses included in the To and CC lines. (Feel free to cut this
>     > introductory paragraph, however.)
>     >
>     >
>     > Please refer to 
> https://www.ietf.org/iesg/statement/discuss-criteria.html
>     > for more information about IESG DISCUSS and COMMENT positions.
>     >
>     >
>     > The document, along with other ballot positions, can be found here:
>     > https://datatracker.ietf.org/doc/draft-ietf-grow-bmp-adj-rib-out/
>     >
>     >
>     >
>     > ----------------------------------------------------------------------
>     > DISCUSS:
>     > ----------------------------------------------------------------------
>     >
>     > Two small points that will be trivial to address:
>     >
>     > — Section 4 —
>     >
>     >   The existing flags are defined in section 4.2 [RFC7854] and the
>     >   remaining bits are reserved for future use.  They SHOULD be
>     >   transmitted as 0 and their values MUST be ignored on receipt.
>     >
>     > Why “SHOULD”?  That’s inconsistent with Section 4.2 of 7854, which says 
> “MUST”.
>     > Failing to set the reserved bits to 0 will cause interoperability 
> problems
>     > with future extensions.
>     >
>     >   The following fields in the Per-Peer Header are redefined:
>     >
>     > You aren’t redefining them completely, right?  Don’t you mean, “When 
> the O flag
>     > is set to 1, the following fields in the Per-Peer Header are 
> redefined:” ?
>     >
>     >
>     > ----------------------------------------------------------------------
>     > COMMENT:
>     > ----------------------------------------------------------------------
>     >
>     > Some editorial comments:
>     >
>     > Throughout: there are five instances of “use-case”.  “Use case” should 
> not be
>     > hyphenated (unless it’s used as a modifier, which it isn’t here).
>     >
>     > — Section 1 —
>     >
>     >   An example of pre-policy verses post-policy is
>     >
>     > You mean “versus”, with a “u” (and also a second time later in the 
> section).
>     >
>     >   This document updates section
>     >   4.2 [RFC7854] per-peer header by adding a new flag
>     >
>     > That’s an odd way to do the citation.  Also, “per-peer header” is 
> misplaced:
>     >
>     > NEW
>     > This document updates the per-peer header in section 4.2 of [RFC7854] 
> by adding
>     > a new flag END
>     >
>     > The other places in the document that say “section 4.2 [RFC7854]” 
> should also
>     > be changed to “section 4.2 of [RFC7854]”.
>     >
>     > — Section 6.3.1 —
>     >
>     >      The Information field contains a free-form
>     >      UTF-8 string whose length is given by the Information Length
>     >      field.
>     >
>     > As one UTF-8 character can be more than one byte, it’s best to specify 
> whether
>     > the length is in bytes or characters.  I would say, “whose byte length 
> is
>     > given....” (also in Section 9.3)
>     >
>     > — Section 9.3 —
>     > The sentence, “The value is administratively given by the Information 
> Length
>     > field.” appears to be a copy/paste error, and should be deleted.
>     >
>     >
>     >
>
>

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