Paul:
Thank you for the quick response. I’ve created a version -08.txt with just these changes. Version -09 adds URL references to version -08.txt Sue Hares From: I2nsf [mailto:[email protected]] On Behalf Of Susan Hares Sent: Wednesday, February 1, 2017 10:01 AM To: 'Mr. Jaehoon Paul Jeong' Cc: [email protected]; 'Adrian Farrel'; 'Linda Dunbar' Subject: Re: [I2nsf] FW: I-D Action: draft-ietf-i2nsf-problem-and-use-cases-07.txt Paul: I will create a version -08 with these changes. Sue From: I2nsf [mailto:[email protected]] On Behalf Of Mr. Jaehoon Paul Jeong Sent: Tuesday, January 31, 2017 8:32 PM To: Susan Hares Cc: [email protected]; Adrian Farrel; Mr. Jaehoon Paul Jeong; Linda Dunbar Subject: Re: [I2nsf] FW: I-D Action: draft-ietf-i2nsf-problem-and-use-cases-07.txt Sue, I checked the revision 07 with the suggested changes as follows: ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------ [page 4] OLD: I2NSF: Interface to Network Security Functions. NEW: I2NSF: Interface to Network Security Functions //delete a period '.' OLD: SDN: Software Defined Networks NEW: SDN: Software-Defined Networking //replace "Networks" with "Networking" [page 8] OLD: Distributed Denial of services NEW: Distributed Denial of Service //replace "services" with "Service". 'S' of "Service" is capital. [page 9] OLD: e.g. encryption algorithms, key deriation NEW: e.g., encryption algorithms, key derivation //add a comma ',' after "e.g." and replace "deriation" with "derivation" [page 15] OLD: e.g. enact/revoke NEW: e.g., enact/revoke //add a comma ',' after "e.g." [page 16] OLD: mobile user,and NEW: mobile user, and //insert a blank between ',' and "and" OLD: use cases #7 NEW: use case #7 //replace "cases" with "case" OLD: (B2B)communications. NEW: (B2B) communications. //insert a blank between "(B2B)" and "communications" [page 17] OLD: access to (or isolation from) to NEW: access to (or isolation from) //delete the second redundant "to" [page 19] OLD: a set timeframes NEW: a set of timeframes //insert "of" between "set" and "timeframes" OLD: virtual machines (VMs) NEW: VMs //delete "virtual machines" because "VMs" is defined in Section 3.1.3 [page 22] OLD: Industry(PCI) NEW: Industry (PCI) //insert a blank between "Industry" and "(PCI)" OLD: [HIPPA] NEW: [HIPAA] [page 24] OLD: [HIPPA] NEW: [HIPAA] [page 25] OLD: [NFVUC] ETSI GS NFV 002 V1.1.1, , "ETSI NFV Group Specification, Network Functions Virtualization (NFV) Use Cases", June 2014. NEW: [NFVUC] ETSI GS NFV 001 V1.1.1, , "ETSI NFV Group Specification, Network Functions Virtualisation (NFV) Use Cases", October 2013. //replace "002" with "001", replace "Virtualization" with "Virtualisation", and replace "June 2014" with "October 2013" [page 26] OLD: Diego R. Lopex NEW: Diego R. Lopez //replace "Lopex" with "Lopez" ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------ Also, I attach a PDF file to have the changes. Thanks for your hard work. Best Regards, Paul On Sun, Jan 29, 2017 at 9:40 AM, Susan Hares <[email protected]> wrote: Linda and Adrian: I believe captures all the edits and fixes all IDNITS in the draft. One warning exists on line 872 for a tab that turns to 8 characters. I cannot find the tab in the xml it is complaining about. I've sent an email to Adrian that indicates the resolution of all comments (Adrian's, David Qi, and Paul Jeong's). I appreciate the detailed review by each of these people. Since these are public comments to accept or not-to accept, I have published the edited version. I rejected a few of Adrian's and Paul Jeong's edits - so I would like to ask Adrian, Paul, and my co-authors to verify you are good with all differences. I do need Adrian to respond on 2 requested changes. Therefore, there will be a version-08 on Monday. Cheers, Sue -----Original Message----- From: I2nsf [mailto:[email protected]] On Behalf Of [email protected] Sent: Saturday, January 28, 2017 7:38 PM To: [email protected] Cc: [email protected] Subject: [I2nsf] I-D Action: draft-ietf-i2nsf-problem-and-use-cases-07.txt A New Internet-Draft is available from the on-line Internet-Drafts directories. This draft is a work item of the Interface to Network Security Functions of the IETF. Title : I2NSF Problem Statement and Use cases Authors : Susan Hares Diego R. Lopex Myo Zarny Christian Jacquenet Rakesh Kumar Jaehoon Paul Jeong Filename : draft-ietf-i2nsf-problem-and-use-cases-07.txt Pages : 27 Date : 2017-01-28 Abstract: This document describes the problem statement for Interface to Network Security Functions (I2NSF) as well as some companion use cases. The IETF datatracker status page for this draft is: https://datatracker.ietf.org/doc/draft-ietf-i2nsf-problem-and-use-cases/ There's also a htmlized version available at: https://tools.ietf.org/html/draft-ietf-i2nsf-problem-and-use-cases-07 A diff from the previous version is available at: https://www.ietf.org/rfcdiff?url2=draft-ietf-i2nsf-problem-and-use-cases-07 Please note that it may take a couple of minutes from the time of submission until the htmlized version and diff are available at tools.ietf.org. Internet-Drafts are also available by anonymous FTP at: ftp://ftp.ietf.org/internet-drafts/ _______________________________________________ I2nsf mailing list [email protected] https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/i2nsf _______________________________________________ I2nsf mailing list [email protected] https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/i2nsf -- =========================== Mr. Jaehoon (Paul) Jeong, Ph.D. Assistant Professor Department of Software Sungkyunkwan University Office: +82-31-299-4957 Email: [email protected], <mailto:[email protected]> [email protected] Personal Homepage: http://iotlab.skku.edu/people-jaehoon-jeong.php <http://cpslab.skku.edu/people-jaehoon-jeong.php>
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