Hi Adrian, I sincerely appreciate your valuable comments. We authors will reflect your comments on the revision.
Thanks. Best Regards, Paul On Sun, Dec 15, 2019 at 4:40 AM Adrian Farrel <[email protected]> wrote: > Hi, > > > > This is a long document and I can’t say I have read it in detail. But what > I have seen looks reasonable. I don’t object to publication. > > > > A couple of things to note: > > > > I suggest putting in an RFC Editor Note to ask that all instances of > “draft-ietf-i2nsf-capability” > including those in YANG reference clauses are updated to the RFC that the > draft will become before this document reaches RFC. The reason for > suggesting this is that those mentions don’t appear as square bracket > references so might get missed. There are some others drafts in the same > situation, but I don’t know if they’ll become RFCs first. > > > > The reference draft-ietf-supa-generic-policy-info-model is probably a bad > idea. I think the draft is dead. The only mention is in section 3, and here > you seem to have copied the relevant text anyway. Maybe just include that > text as your own definitions, and move on? > > > > Idnits has a lot to say. You should sort it out. > > > https://www6.ietf.org/tools/idnits?url=https://www.ietf.org/archive/id/draft-ietf-i2nsf-nsf-facing-interface-dm-08.txt > > The ‘standard’ way of handling references from with the YANG model, where > you can’t include square brackets, is to put a piece of text at the top > (outside the model) that says: “This model makes reference to [foo], [bar], > and [fishcake].” > > You can easily delete section 2. > > > > It would be nice if the figures were directly referenced from the text. > Instead of “This YANG tree diagram shows…” say “The YANG tree diagram in > Figure x shows…” > > > > Best, > > Adrian > > > > *From:* I2nsf <[email protected]> *On Behalf Of *Linda Dunbar > *Sent:* 03 December 2019 22:23 > *To:* [email protected] > *Cc:* Yoav Nir <[email protected]> > *Subject:* [I2nsf] WGLC and IPR poll for > draft-ietf-i2nsf-nsf-facing-interface-dm-08 > > > > > > Hello Working Group, > > > > Many thanks to the authors of draft-ietf-i2nsf-nsf-facing-interface-dm to > address all the comments from YANG Doctor review. > > > > This email starts a three weeks Working Group Last Call > on draft-ietf-i2nsf-nsf-facing-interface-dm-08 > > https://datatracker.ietf.org/doc/draft-ietf-i2nsf-nsf-facing-interface-dm/ > <https://nam03.safelinks.protection.outlook.com/?url=https%3A%2F%2Fdatatracker.ietf.org%2Fdoc%2Fdraft-ietf-i2nsf-nsf-facing-interface-dm%2F&data=02%7C01%7Clinda.dunbar%40futurewei.com%7C9bcce04caea74f6b257508d778356660%7C0fee8ff2a3b240189c753a1d5591fedc%7C1%7C0%7C637110043059543710&sdata=IPm4dDBvEfO8Wf6HpSOQCrB%2Fta1zB7E0TX8XMvWmTuA%3D&reserved=0> > > > > > This poll runs until Jan 6, 2020 (considering many people taking Christmas > to New Year off). > > > > We are also polling for knowledge of any undisclosed IPR that applies to > this Document, to ensure that IPR has been disclosed in compliance with > IETF IPR rules (see RFCs 3979, 4879, 3669 and 5378 for more details). > > If you are listed as an Author or a Contributor of this Document, please > respond to this email and indicate whether or not you are aware of any > relevant undisclosed IPR. The Document won't progress without answers from > all the Authors and Contributors. > > > > If you are not listed as an Author or a Contributor, then please > explicitly respond only if you are aware of any IPR that has not yet been > disclosed in conformance with IETF rules. > > > > Thank you. > > > > Linda & Yoav > _______________________________________________ > I2nsf mailing list > [email protected] > https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/i2nsf > -- =========================== Mr. Jaehoon (Paul) Jeong, Ph.D. Associate Professor Department of Software Sungkyunkwan University Office: +82-31-299-4957 Email: [email protected], [email protected] Personal Homepage: http://iotlab.skku.edu/people-jaehoon-jeong.php <http://cpslab.skku.edu/people-jaehoon-jeong.php>
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